Identity

I guess this poem isn't really 'dark' but nice job. Can't criticize much cos I don't think i'm entitled to but maybe just work a little on the words? I dunno but for me i think this piece can be expanded into prose rather than poetry..or maybe that's just coz i think prose is easier.
Good job though :)

Always we seek to identify ourselves, and to have others identify us as we wish.
Your poem is deep, and I do not, personally, think it needs any work.
Delightful read.

The poem is good, I can't really criticize it. The way you spaced the lines made it flow nicely and made it more dramatic, I would suggest that you add some more descriptions, if anything, but its fine the way it is.