Wow, this is amazing :] you did a good job. i love how i didn't expect the ending how it wasn't really there you know i believe thats how it was told.

keep it up.
keep on writing.
love always and forever.

This started off so full of love and a beautiful explination of it, then it changed, to the unruley unfortunate events of what can occur with it. I like the way you described the love in the beginning, then in the end it all failed, or was never there like you thought it was. Showed great emotion from bliss to sadness. Great piece, flowed well and had a point.

Tammie xo