A very good poem, yet you need to fix up spelling and punctuation.
Anyway very well written peice of work. Well done.

Wow this poem is so very deep and the pure emotion you put in it was very raw and powerful. i loved how you put the last out of body type of experence in the last stanza to end the story with. this poem is great and i give it a 5/5.

Powerful write...
deep and so emotional...

"they carried my body out in a body bag.
told my parents that i overdosed on pills.
&& in the end cut myself up.
with written i love you forever. "

^^ this is so touching......

good write...
keep writing..

Wow, I gotta say, I really liked this. (Gah, I'm no good at giving feedback). Just great:)

Thanks for the comment on "The Road to Heaven"!

The Angel of Secrets

This is good.but some parts seemed like it was more of a story rather than a poem.

"your the one who is on my mind.
the one who i fell so in love with.
now I'm lay on the floor."

^^ in the last line "now im lay on the floor" should be changed to "now im lying on the floor."

but overall it was pretty good and i still think it deserves a 5/5

Oh my goodness.. this was soooooo intense.. wow.. um, I know a lot of people can relate to doing the same thing and wanting nothing more but to kill themselves.. because it will only put them out of the misery they are feeling.. I just hope this poem wasn't real. :| yikesss. a great way of expressing you feelings and emotions and such for sure though.. nice write.. 5/5.