I really like the abstractions you have put into this one. My favorite verse was: 'My eyes were only closed So you would not feel smaller.'

This was really good. I love your choice of words and the flow. But I couldn't figure out what you were trying to say. Probably really deep if I can't figure it out. But it's amazing. Add more detail and try to have the bridge from one image to another not be so rocky.
Great job though!

I love the wording its so unique and not like so many others i like "different" and this one is! Good job

Great poem, very intense and passionate. I don't like rhyming too much because it isn't original but other than that excellent piece. I love the way that you expressed emotions, very captivating.
Well done, I really enjoyed in this one.

Wow... I love this from the beginning to the end. Whole poem is amazing, creative and greatly written. Original piece, very intense and descriptive.
My favorite stanza is:

-We all have choices
in a secret life,
A glimpse of perfection,
Tantalized.-
^^
So beautiful.

The whole poem has great flow, too.

Keep up!