by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA Dec 24, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
You went away |
by Syndicate
I love the feelings you express in this poem, it's something everyone can relate to. the flow is pretty good and I like the way you organized your stanzas. especially the first two stanzas: eyecatching ;) 5/5 |
by Brandon Lee
It had a lot of emotion which I like. It did not flow for me though. You used a good variety, except you used the word "yearn" alot. I have noticed that you use that alot which makes it a little more boring to read. I understand that you are using that word because it is a strong word but you should try replacing it sometimes with other words such as "desire" which has the same meaning and strength. I hope you use this constructivly as I do look forward to seeing what you write in the future. 4/5 |
by Lonely Rider
Very beautiful and heartfelt... |
by Mike Wilburn
Anthony is a very lucky guy. |
by Brandy
This poem is sad yet wonderful...I can relate to how u feel... |