Day Old Hate

by Tammie   Dec 25, 2007


I miss you like tomorrows innocence and it hurts like yesterdays torture
Harsh words fall on partly deaf ears and aging honesty seems to never get old
I never asked for this, but now you've gone and are never to be followed
Missing pieces fall in such a pretty pile on the floor in the spot where you used to stand
And I don't want to sweep them in hope that you'll disappear too, because I know you won't

Streetlights blew in anger and left me in darkness to wonder these streets alone
Sombre goodbyes were lost in the ruthless words uncalled for leaving lasting impressions
Sinking in on my aching heart that is missing that love that was never really there
Time passes slowly in false hope that eventually you will come to realise you miss me
But it's been six days, I'm exhausted and begging you pitifully to come running back

I thought this day old hate would pass on as quickly as it came but now I know I'm wrong
Personally, I think you should reconsider your actions and let the consequences speak for themselves
Although since when did anything I ever say get the better of you anyway?
I once thought you'd understand but I guess I'm wrong and was from the beginning
And unfortunately again I've come out the worst of the two in this situation

Words don't flow as easy as they used to and songs play on ears so delicately sore
This ink seems to be everlasting yet my writing has ceased to express me sufficiently
Meanings encased in words evaporate just like my false hope for you is being recognised
And sure enough, I've passed on my goodbye messages just for you to push them away
So now I'm left astonished at how you can erase all significance out of anything I ever did or said.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I know you said you can't see to write anymore so I wanted to go back in time to where your poetry was blooming and show you that you can write, and you will write like this once again. It takes awhile to brake the block. I just say my muse is lazy lol. This piece, Hun. Just wow. The simplicity poured off the page yet the emotions felt so deep, these two things portrayed a brilliant contrast with each other. Truely wonderful. One thing i've noticed about your poetry you seem to love adjectives just as much as I love metaphors. Each has their own personal favorite technique and I feel like i've found yours. I think you know how much I adore long lines and you've always pulled them off nicely while still keeping the flow in tact. Friendship and love poems, well they don't seem to please me as much as dark and sad, guess that's either because i'm an evil evil person lol or the emotion is just stronger is them. Still with this piece you were on a beautiful level. I nearly loved this piece as much as I love reading dark poems. You kept my attention from start until finish and didn't let me take my mind off your words once. I wish I could pik out a favorite part but I can't as each line were so great in their own way. You have created a beautiful gem here which really sparked my interest. Well done.

    5/5 hun. ~Mel

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Amazing. It was deep, powerful and held meaning. It said something and spoke to me. The imagery in this piece truly worked for the poem and made it complete. I could feel myself in the poem because you described everything so beautifully. The language you used was just flawlessly perfect. I loved the long lines, you worked it well. *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Jason Meres

    My Dear Miss Tammie,
    I think I can imagine you writing this. Your somber eyes scanning each line for half-placed metaphors, trying to catch up to what your heart wrote when you weren't looking. You're not sad, you kind of wanna be, but you're not. You're just telling the truth.

    Truly touching.

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow... I love this. The long lines created truly interesting flow through the whole piece. This is the best friendship poem I've read in a while, with excellently expressed emotions.
    Your descriptions are fantastic, so creative and vivid. This piece pulled me in from the first line and kept my attention to the great ending stanza. The first stanza is my favorite one.
    Keep up the great work!

  • 16 years ago

    by Jake

    Pretty good! :)

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