A Lovely Night

by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA   Dec 27, 2007


The stars and moon join together,
To light up a lovely night.
Every moment we spend together,
Just feels so right.

We lay on the sandy beach,
Looking up at the sky.
You explain to me what stars represent,
Full of sincerity in every word you say.

The ring you gave me that night,
Sparkles like the stars in the sky.
You told me you chose this night,
So the ring could shine like the stars.

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  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    Awe. a beautiful poem.
    very touching and i like the imagery.
    amazing write. 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Diabolic Atrocity

    Awww, this poem really touched me, maybe it's just because of how much I love space and being inlove, and you incorporated the two so well, but it was just such a good poem, though you may want to work on your rhyming a little bit, other than that it's great ^_^

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    Aww
    I liked the last stanza
    it was really cute sweet and touching
    although I know this means a lot to you
    so let the poem be filled with every emotion
    your feeling
    I think if you would have wrote how
    amazing you felt it would have made the poem
    have more of a significence
    5/5
    kaila

  • 16 years ago

    by MyEscape

    A very romantic concept for a proposal. I like that part of it. It creates a nice feeling! Good job!
    *ME*

  • 16 years ago

    by Anonymous

    Nice1. pretty fluffy if ya ask me, but that's okay, we all have our fluffy poems. I love this:

    The stars and moon join together,
    To light up a lovely night.
    Every moment we spend together,
    Just feels so right.

    but there aren't enough syllables in the 4th line, not enough beats. you really need to work on the flow in this poem, it's got potential.

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