A beautiful poem, the story behind it was great and really makes you realize just how far you will go for love. I like you way of dscribing things and you painted a great picture in my mind.

In the first line of stanza 1 I think that the poem would flow better if the comma wasn't there it kind of breaks the poem. If that makes sense to you.

Another thing, you get going into a great line and then it is cut short without any describing words and goes to the next one, where I see this at is >>

All dressed up waiting;
Hoping he is alright.

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All dressed up waiting patiently; Hoping he is alright

Not only does the extra word make the overall poem sound better but it can also allow the reader to relate to a time where they felt this way. Also, your punctuation is great and has a HUGE effect on your work. Just make sure you keep it interesting. The only other thing I can truly see wrong is you use his a lot in the last stanza, try finding antonyms for that word.

Great way to end the poem, I feel that it summed it up perfectly. A beautiful poem hun :]]

Amber :]]

Wow. i loved the flow of the poem, and i love how it was almost calming, although it was abt something used to provoke anger. i really liked it. awesome job!!