A Walk In My Shoes

I love the opening you used in this piece, it is something that many people will be thinking or can relate to over and over again throughout their life, and the imagery you put in created very vivid pictures so that it was like I could -see- what you were describing right from the opening line.

I liked how you described different things in each stanza, it made the poem feel far more lifelike than it would have done if you'd spoken of the same person throughout the piece.

Your flow in this is pretty good, the words just fall right of my tounge, while the message behind the piece is strong and clear.

However, I think you could make this better if you added more to it...it's good as it is, yes. But go into a little more detail, add more problems each neighbourhood faces, and this could be even better than it is now.

Very well described poem! i like how you can really picture taking this walk with you and seeing these people. You painted this so well...so vividly. It was sad to think these circumstances exist and some people face them on a day to day basis. That's the world for you. One day it'll get better, but not by anything man can do. Anyhoo...good job!
*ME*

"A life lived in decency
seems misunderstood
welcome to a wasted life
in my neighborhood."

That stanza made the poem for me.
The term "wasted life" really stuck out, It shows what society has come to.

You took a topic which everyone, no matter where in the world can try and relate to.

Well done.♥