Ouch, the ending left has a... bad aftertaste if you get my analogy. But I loved the poem. It was well-written and deep. The concept had me wanting to read more. And the flow made it so nice to read. Great poem! 5/5

This is so sad but i loved it.your making my favorites list full....I love your writing so passionet..
~Jo Anna EL

Wow i loved it.So sad yet so emotionly filled.The passion you put into this one is really inspiring..You making my favorites get filled...
~Jo Anna El

Excellent!

I love the concept!, the wordings, rhymes...the whole stuff...I wish I could write like this, lol!

Very true!
Keep on rocking!

I simply adored this piece!It relates to everyone so well and you can feel the emotion and expression.A tragic ending especially to what should have been a happy little fairytale that ends with a kiss.
But then again some of us never get to the happily ever after part....

~Jo Anna EL

Wow i simply adored this poem.A tragic tale of how a princess never gets her prince.Thats how i thought of it.Beautiful rhyming. I liked it.And what a devastating ending to what i imagined should have been ended with a kiss.True loves sweet kiss.
THen again some of us never get our happily ever afters...
~Jo Anna EL

Wow i simply adored this poem.A tragic tale of how a princess never gets her prince.Thats how i thought of it.Beautiful rhyming. I liked it.And what a devastating ending to what i imagined should have been ended with a kiss.True loves sweet kiss.
THen again some of us never get our happily ever afters...
~Jo Anna EL

The AABB CCDD EEFF GGHH rhyme pattern was softly hidden and unpredictable. This is good. I hate to read a poem that i can guess the next rhyming word. The part "the story should have gone in order from beginning to end" seems to me that the speaker is stating that the beginning was the end, and that, while still a story with a front and back but no content in between.

Wow this is really really beautiful yet sad. i loved every word. a great beginning and a great ending. excellent job at expressing yourself. 5/5.

-Ashlei.