Broken Angel

by MeltInHisArms   Dec 29, 2007


Broken angel full of fears,
cries for help but no one hears.
Broken angel wants to fly,
but she needs some help; she's way to shy.
Broken angel lays there shattered,
but people pass her thinking she doesn't matter.
Broken angel looks up at the sky,
spreads her wings and tries to fly.
As she fell her questions tore her,
all she ever wanted was someone there for her.

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  • 16 years ago

    by neo

    Really expressive

  • 16 years ago

    by Curing the Comon Cliche

    Amazing...very amazing. i know so many ppl that could fit perfectly into this poem. keep writing. thanks :]

  • 16 years ago

    by Curing the Comon Cliche

    Amazing...very amazing. i know so many ppl that could fit perfectly into this poem. keep writing. thanks :]

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    I forgot: Rhyming left really bad impression on me. It seem so forced and I want to suggest you to try to write non0rhyming poems because this piece would be so much better if it doesn't rhyme.

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Interesting poem, somehow touching. I think that emotions are expressed in a good way.
    It could be longer. If you use some more powerful and unique words and metaphors it would sound even better and you could create stronger atmosphere.
    Anyway, I think that you wrote this with passion and it is really nice poem.

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