Really beautiful
and i like the way you repeat words:
"break. break", "she cried. she cried"
it enphasizes how deep are feelings

Excellent!- I=I really like this, its deep and so emotional keep it up...

Very powerful, i totally understand this, amazing job

Wow this is amazing you should comment my poems

Beautiful piece - the mood and tone are really set early in the poem, giving the audience something to base their first impression off of, and then it is carried on throughout the poem. The repetition (Scream. Scream./Break. Break.) is really noticable, and stands out appropriately in the text.

Overall, absolutely lovely.

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