Its only you

This reminds me of a poem that they would have at the very beginning of a book to start it off. This poem has a very interesting flow and I really like it. Thank you for your comment on my poem. ^^ Keep it up!

Ook well with this poem i think you missed the "s" in the end of alway a lot. Then umm i think just repeating that was just too much. Like its ok to repeat things but not soo much like that, like if you were to put it in different words or in a different way it would be better. && like i said before mostly this all comes down to re-reading your things before you submit it.

Thz for ur comment i will try hard

There's nothing wrong with a little repetition in a poem, but when there is too much the readers attention will wander. When someone is reading your poetry you want them to be completely engrossed from beginning to end.

As others have said ^^ the spelling & punctuation of a poem is big too. Well I know that I would be more strongly drawn to a well structured, neat, well worded poem than to reading a 'txt-message' language, messy poem. (Unless of course it is in context.) Speaking of words I would try to expand your vocabulary, use bigger/more unique type words and this will contribute towards the flow and overall effect of your poetry.

Anyways, I hope that this helps :) But please don't think that I didnt like your poem because I did. But I prefer getting comments from people who correct me or offer suggestions so I can improve my way of writing...So keep it up as the more you write the better you'll get.

Alyssa. x

Thz i will it was my first and i try to learn