Oh i like the ist and 3rd stanza.. its kinda really has a deep emotions and very hard feelings.. i can relate at the same time love it! 5/5

Loved the poem awesome work hun...but i think Alexis has a point about the & and U..

Aw, sad yet very beautiful. The emotion in this was great and the flow fit just perfect. Great job! 5/5

.:CiNdY:.

Okay. I'm going to tell you how it could be better:

First of all, you need to change all the “u’s” to “you.”

2gether should be “together”

Remember to capitalize.

The 1 should be “one”

ill should be I’ll

Prey [pray*]

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although everyday I'm in pain [Although]
& my anger grows[,]

there are things i need to say
that no one else knows

With these lines : I think it would be better like this. JUST MY IDEA!:

"There are things I need to say --
Things that no one else knows"

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one day i prey & i hope[,] [just capitalize]
ill see u smile again for me [capitalize]

because we were made for each other
we were meant to be

With these lines.. I think it'd be better:

Because we were made for each other;
Baby, we were meant to be.

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Okay, and again. These are my opinions & thoughts you don't have to take them :]

But, I still really liked this poem. It had a good flow && was so very beautiful. It showed so much emotion, and was just heart-melting :]

Good job, dear.

That was a great love poem! So full of love, and sadness. Your message was clear and I loved the beginning verse... it so true and you captured those thoughts so well!
My tears don't take the pain away
& my screams don't stop the ache
my anger doesn't make me miss u less
& my smiles are only fake

Wow wow wooow
i love it, very beautiful and touching poem

have "waiting for you.." as a title is enough to give you 5/5 hehe

Again the flow is really good however the lines are bit cliche ... still the emotion was strong and once again it was an enjoyable read.,. keep up the good work

You did great job with rhymes, created truly flawless flow from the beginning to the end.
Whole poem is very emotional and greatly written, heartfelt and touching.
The only think I don't like is mentioning the name in the last stanza. I don't want to offend you, that's just my opinion, but I think that it would be better if you change it.
My favorite stanza is:

-my head plays the things u said
& all the lies u told
especially the one of eternity
& 2gether we'll grow old-

Keep up!

I really really like this one

it's very thoughtful

:)

~paige

I love the way this poem made me feel. It made me feel all warm and just left me with a smile. The descriptions you used were beautiful and the fact that you have hope is a really good thing because it doesnt let you dwell in saddness. Well done *5/5*

Wonderful poem
the flow was good
rhyme was good
and the overall poem was
well amazing
you did a good job
i loveed it
5/5
kaila

THIS IS EXACTLY WHAT IM FEELING!! you took the words right out of my mouth!....this was really sweet; sad, but sweet! umm in the second to the last stanza i think you meant pray & not prey hehe :) but yes...very cute sad poem!! :)

Keep it up --n-- Take care!!