This is where you screwed up:
You're always on my mind,
Throughtout the night and day.
Whenever I think you,
Everything just feels so right.

it should have been:
You're always on my mind,
Throughtout the day and night.
Whenever I think you,
Everything just feels so right.

so it could ryhme with night.
but, its all good. i think the
words and topic was lovly.
i'm rating you good.