The Maze

by Poetic Ninja aka Papachopchop   Jan 4, 2008


Take now a moment,
And enter my mind's eye,
The twisted Labyrinth within,
That reaches to the sky.

The paths are overgrown,
And the walls, riddled in vines,
Can you find the prize?
To this broken heart of mine?

Some routes are blocked,
Where admittance is denied,
Created from the sorrows,
Of those that made me cry.

Can you persevere,
And continue to retry?
To find the buried treasure,
Of this broken heart of mine?

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  • 16 years ago

    by Kitten

    Great poem

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Letty

    Wow!!! This is truly wonderful. I loved this poem. It almost brought me to tears, and I'm not just saying that. The flow was off a little in some parts; but with the way you painted the picture of this poem, it wasn't that noticeable. This poem was very creative. It pulled me into it and held me captive. I think you did a wonderful job, but you just need to touch up a few words to make the flow better. Wonderful work though. I really think that you are going to be a great poet someday: and when it happens remember that I told you that you so first. : )

    Great Job!
    Letty

  • 16 years ago

    by Elizabeth

    Beautiful!
    5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by shamvi

    Wow...i like this one very much..ur such a good writer

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    I loved this, Darling. I can't exactly pinpoint my favorite stanza or line because it's all amazing. xD

    You did a wonderful job with the emotion, flow, and wording and all that goodygoody. : ]

    xD I loved it.
    5/5

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