by Armada the Gestalt Jan 4, 2008
category :
Life, society /
about society
With venomous lies, |
Wow. Just wow. I'm totally amazed. I really get an almost haunted feeling from this one. Awesome write for sure :) I know that the use of a repeated verse usually takes great amount of care and balancing and too often ruins the poem (a.k.a my The Night Is Silent poem. I wouldn't recommend that one xDD) and too little it almost isn't caught, but you did an awesome job with the repeated verse through this one. I really like the rhyme through out it and the ending line is a twist. :) :) |