Who Cares?!

1st stanza:

Fanbloodytastic! I love it, it was incredibly intense and hooked me into the poem right away, I couldn't wait to continue on.

2nd stanza: I love the emotion in this stanza..it wreaks of melancholy and depression and a whole given up feeling..definietly tugged on my heartstrings.

"I ruined everything good
everything I've ever gotten"

^^ Favourite lines so far. I read those and thought, how many people will be able to relate to that feeling? I'm sure it's a lot, and after all, being able to relate to someone's poetry is what makes the poem good.

"forget the "blessed" light
give me death instead"

^^How incredibly saddening...brought tears to my eyes. These lines were so sad and moving and yet at the same time you managed to convey so much emotion and depth in few words, which made the lines very powerful.

"All I want now is peace
I wasted every chance
I've finally given up hope
on lifes deceptive romance"

^^These lines are beautiful...filled with melancholy and depression, yes, but beautiful nontheless. That stanza alone holds almost as much power as the entire piece together.

Last stanza: Holy crap, I love that. What a PERFECT way to end this heart wrenching piece. It speaks volumes, and when I read this stanza it brought out so many conflicting emotions in me. Stunning and hardhitting, and certainly an ending I wont be forgetting in a hurry.

The only thing I wasn't to keen on with this piece was the constant use of "i" and I've." It felt like they were repeated to much. Try eliminating some of those and this piece will be perfect in every way.

On the whole, I love this.