This poem was very direct in meaning and had a unique fluency. The emotions have an interesting aspect on them, because you use them strongly, yet in the poem they are pertained as weak and hasty... like a "final breath" so to speak. I hope that makes sense. You've done some nice work here. I liked reading it.

I liked reading this poem, the meaning was clearly defined and i liked how the emotions were there it seemed different and really strong 5/5