Wow, this poem was absolutely amazing. The emotion in this poem was so powerful and the imagery great. The flow was good and very well written. I love the way you wrote it. Great job! 5/5

.:CiNdY:.

I really like it. the story is great the structure is great, my only problem, it didn't really give me closure. It needed more. The girl, whether this story about you or some one else, does she go through a journey of self discovery or continue to question herself?
Taegan Emily
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This is a very effective poem.. i love the words u used. it worked perfectly. i think this poem is very good. it deserves nothing lower than a 5 :)

So beautiful, can i print this off and show it to this guy i like, i'll give you full credit. wow this is so beautifully written, very very good... 5/5

Wow this is good. alot of questioning and thinking lets you realize your self and who means what to you. i like this poem because of that. nice good keep on writing.

:O this poem is amazing the wording and the feeling in this poem are both amazing, well done

I love this poem. It made me rethink somethings about a guy.

I actually loved the ending, more than I thought I would.
It was so different, than what I expected.

You did a wonderful job with this darling, as usual. xD
Keep it up.
5.5

Nice, I liked it. Emotional and deep, but simple on the brain and easy to read and understand. The use of rhetorical questions worked really well and I thought the flow went smoothly. Good write.

Sole.x

I really enjoyed this piece, Expecially the first stanza. I liked how by writing the first stanza the way you did it left me questions to be answered throughout the poem. It wasn't just layed out infront of the reader. The simplicity of this piece was enjoyable, you used simple word choice which were quite effective. The flow was stunning, not once did it falter in my opinion. You ended it sweetly, though the emotions portrayed within this were mixed, I liked that about the poem because mixed emotions are exactly what you would feel at a the time of this situation. Overall an amazing read. Well done. 5/5 ~Mel

*ponders*
I like this one, I like it a lot actually.
There's something different about it. [In a good way.] It made me think. Haha, which is always good. :) It had a story-type-thing going on, and it flowed perfectly. The emotions were strong, and you ended it beautifully. Overall: 5.5 :)

- Steph.

I cant relate to this poem. nicely done. love it

Those r gr8 questions. lov is sad:)

I thoroughly enjoyed the subject matter. The conflict of the narrator was immediately apparent. Unfortunately, the poem suffered from fragmented transitions and weak flow.
'intertwinement of nonexistence' - just an example, but it definitely caused me to pause and broke the rhythm of your poem. Still, I did enjoy it, and would love to see the poem refined! Thanks for the read.

I don't think that you broke the flow at all in this poem. I believe that every word can mean something powerful. and if you added any more your poem might have been overwhelming. great job. lovely
5
(~:Sam Mayo:~)

This poem was very well written and it flowed really nicely, too. I think you did a really great job on writing it. You expressed yourself very well. 5/5

~Kristina

Wow another powerful ending. You know how to end your poems with a BANG so they can linger with the reader after they are done reading ... good job! I loved the questions you asked because they are ones I have asked before. Overall a great write. *5/5*

*Thank you for you comment on my poem .. it really meant a lot*

The flow wasnt that great on this one.. i think some of the lines were a bit long..maybe if you seperate them it would read much better... but overall it was still a good poem. 5/5.

Aww really sweet, especially loved the first stanza, sucked me in to the rest of the poem =)

Em xXx

I love this piece. You picked great topic to write a poem and you truly wrote this piece greatly. I can relate to this piece in a way which makes it even more powerful for me.
Meaningful poem, very deep from the beginning to the end.
My favorite stanza is:

- Someone once asked me if I care about him truly
About not only him, but his life as well
And that's when I started thinking, "Do I really?
Or do I only care about the past on which I dwell?"-
^^
Amazing introduction, it pulled me straight into this piece.

5/5

A different poem I must say but it was done in such a very special way I liked it alot the flow was good the message abit off the wall but kudos for originality