Wow, this poem brought tears to my eyes. its so strong of emotion. i love it.. u do need to read through it and fix a few errors tho. i loved it neways. great job

YES I KNOW THERE IS SPELLING MISTAKES :]

It was a good piece. It had an interesting story, although you did know what was going to happen, and some nice rhymes. I think my favorite stanza was the seventh one, mainly I think because of the ryhme.

Brad

P.S. You've sure managed to put quite a few poems on considering you've only been a member for four days, lol. Good work

Wow that was so beautifully written. The emotion was so strong, and the power and message behind the poem is huge. It holds so much! The flow is perfect! And your choice of words was great!
Keep up the amazing work :)

I love this poem because if you turn the he's into she's and vice versa, and I did what I was going too.... this would have been played out for real. Greatly written, you spoke to my soul with this one. 5/5

You got such amazing talent out there...
i love it very much
i can imagine the story like it happened in front of me

Oh my gosh

that was really really really good

i started tearing...literally!!

Wow.. i love thispoem... the emotion is soo strong and the flow is really great which adds to how enjoyable it was reading... keep it up.

Very touching sad piece, filled with emotions expressed in a good way. I like the way you wrote it- simply and straight to the point because that added greater effect to described feelings.
The story behind the poem kept my attention from the beginning to the end.

See, the thing with these poems is that everyone goes through awful breakups, so everyone's got a poem like this. Seriously. I'm guilty too. =] Good, though. If only it wasn't over-done.

This actually does remind me of my own writing...=)
it surely is deeply sad and heartbreaking...
Though, it is true that most people only notice how wonderful it is what they have, when they lose it (in this case "her") and this is the most sad part of it all, the small possibility that anything like this can come true...

what I actually meant was that this poem is beautifully sad...
(i wonder who has been downrating here...4.9? you deserve a 10...=)) )

*take care*
isabel

This is another sad and powerful poem its filled with such deep emotion i love this poem 5/5

--emz--

Aww this is soo sad! poor girl!! poor boy!.....wow, nice job though! i think in the last stanza your missing an IS between SHE is GONE..

Keep it up --n-- Take care!!