Your Gone..Come Back
by crystaljean88 Jan 6, 2008
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Latest Comments
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16 years ago
by Kaila
I loved the first stanza in every line. It really spoke out to me. I think that if you go with this and improve for the next piece.
You'll do great!
5/5
kaila -
16 years ago
Dat is good, I felt so related to this. I used to feel that so much in my past, man, a lot and I am thinkin writing abt it. Gurl, u r so so good!
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16 years ago
by Blissful
It was short, sweet, and to the point. I do think you could add some more emotions to it to make it more real but the way you have it is okay too. I will have to give you a *4/5* because it can be improved on and I know you can do it!
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16 years ago
Well I absolutely loved it. Sure it seemed kind of rocky, but I absolutely loved it. Especially the way you wrote it. Good job! 5/5
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16 years ago
No like you said it not perfect, but its pretty good. if i were you id be pretty happy with this one! its good and flows nice. and poetry for me is getting whats on ur mind and ur feelings out and u have certainly done a good job of that! well done
xx
Taegan Emily
