Its the hardest thing to do.

by xxTaegan Emilyxx   Jan 6, 2008


She sat in the chair,
Waiting for her mum,
She come home drunk,
Holding a bottle of rum.

Her mums breath stank,
Of beer and smoke,
She glared at her daughter,
And then she spoke.

"Your nothing but a failure",
"And i never loved you",
"Your worthless and selfish",
"Your stupid brother too".

Those words were enough,
She leapt through the air,
Her brother she grabbed,
As she jumped off the chair.

She walked out that door,
Left her mother where she stand,
Her brother so terrified,
Squeezing her hand.

He looked up at her and spoke,
"Sis i'm scared will we be ok?"
His eyes wide with shock,
How could she treat her children this way?.

"We are going to be fine",
"Just you wait and see",
"We will live on our own",
"Just you and me".

A tiny smile crept across his face,
She looked at him with glee,
Their mother didn't go after them,
She just let them leave.

No one in the world,
Deserves what they went through,
Some times walking out that door,
Is the hardest thing to do.

**I think the first paragraph is a bit weak but i couldn't get the words out any other way lol.

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  • 16 years ago

    by EssenceOfLace

    But sometimes walking out the door, is the best thing to do.
    "She come home drunk,
    Holding a bottle of rum"

    should be
    "She came home drunk,
    Holding a bottle of rum"

    amazing and so sad. i loved the rhyming technique.
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    This whole piece is quite simple, nothing wrong with that. The first stanza was fine to me matched in well with the rest of them. the story line I enjoyed. I found it to be sweetly sad and the emotions you portrayed here were deep, touching and heartfelt. I think the one thing with this poem is you revealed alot. You didn't leave much of the poem for the reader to think about. From the first two stanzas. You kind of knew what ws going on. Not a bad piece overall. Well done. ~Mel

  • 16 years ago

    by ALEX

    Really touching, maybe work on word choice a little, like you said. Keep at it.

  • 16 years ago

    by BrixGoesxRawr

    This is really sad.. made me want to cry ;/
    But, it was a very beautiful piece. I can pretty much relate to it...

    There's some spelling errors & punctuation needed in some places.
    But, other than that.. amazing job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Kia

    I really like this poem... i like how it reveals just enough information for the reader to take the main idea and make it their own. i feel that the two most important elements in poetry are the ablities to get your points across and to connect with the reader allowing them to create their own interpertations of the work.

    This poem had good flow and was very easy to read. the only stanza that i had problems with was this on

    Those words were enough,
    She leapt through the air,
    Her brother she grabbed,
    As she jumped off the chair.

    It wasnt as smooth as the other stanzas the words tripped me up. possible rewording in this stanza would allow the reader to continue to flow through the poem and make it more as a story. i got tripped up on that stanza and the flow of the poem was completly lost to me.

    other than that AWESOME JOB

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