I don't see anything wrong with the first |
by Kia
I really like this poem... i like how it reveals just enough information for the reader to take the main idea and make it their own. i feel that the two most important elements in poetry are the ablities to get your points across and to connect with the reader allowing them to create their own interpertations of the work. |
This is really sad.. made me want to cry ;/ |
by ALEX
Really touching, maybe work on word choice a little, like you said. Keep at it. |
by Melpomene
This whole piece is quite simple, nothing wrong with that. The first stanza was fine to me matched in well with the rest of them. the story line I enjoyed. I found it to be sweetly sad and the emotions you portrayed here were deep, touching and heartfelt. I think the one thing with this poem is you revealed alot. You didn't leave much of the poem for the reader to think about. From the first two stanzas. You kind of knew what ws going on. Not a bad piece overall. Well done. ~Mel |
But sometimes walking out the door, is the best thing to do. |