This was phenomenal! Truly powerful with so much pure emotion! I loved your choice of words, and your message was so clear. This was a brilliant write! Keep up the amazing work!

I like the word choice and the free flow in this well written poem, the passion conveyed is really outstanding

Beautiful emotion and thoughts but the flow wasnt good enough! but though i still love the message coz its kinda sweet and inspiring 5/5

This is a very cute poem, but I didn't really like the structure of it. I think it will look better if it were put into stanzas, it shows more feeling like that. I loved it the imagery in this though. It's a good poem.

.:CiNdY:.

Wow! Unique poem, this isn't typical love poem which is great, I admire your idea for this piece, totally remarkable and interesting.

I have just two suggestions, first i really leaves a bad impression on me when it isn't written I, i want to say i=I

Second, with a use of punctuation, you could create a poem that is more easy to read and punctuation can also help you to make a rhythm in some part more intense.

I love this random thoughts and broken lines! I think that you written this poem excellently, (you deserves 5/5 and all that) also I must say bravo! I enjoyed in every line.