Sympathetic
by FountainsOfBlood Jan 6, 2008
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[[I would say this is more of a song, so I'm setting it out as song format... if you think different let me know... dunno if it's good i wrote it during writers block and at 12 night... erm... yeah, dunno if it's finished]] |
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16 years ago
by Void
Hey, I really like this. However, being a lyricist myself, that's to be expected :P. I would love to hear the melody behind it though, whether it's faster or slower. Especially because, if it's faster (or just not too slow) then I would have to vote for 'not finished' because most songs have a third verse that changes up a little. It's what keeps the listener tuned into the song, and not bored. Anyone singing along, gets a chance to sing to another melody or another key. So if this song isn't already long enough to be a song, I'd say you'd want a part like that. Keep your song always sounding fresh, even after the fourth time on repeat.
Great job though. Especially for your age. You impress me. :)
