Hold My Hand
by Midnight Sun Jan 8, 2008
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I wanna tell you a secret |
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16 years ago
It was good, especially it being your first piece after writer's block, don't I just know how that feels, lol. I think the weakest stanza, was the first one. You could've said 'ears' instead of 'ear' and you could've taken out the 'salty', both of these suggestions I feel would have made the stanza flow better. I liked what it was about, and also that you never shared the secret. I think, I THINK, don't quote me, but I think the best stanza was the last one. I loved the rhyme (which is always key for me), and the last line especially was strong and powerful.
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16 years ago
by Dan Ryan
I liked this one too, especially the first stanza about the salty tears
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16 years ago
by SilentRebuke
I liked it allot! Hope your writers block is broken, can't wait to read more.
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16 years ago
by Allanon
It was a very creative poem. It flowed well and it kept its pace. outstanding 5/5
~Allanon -
16 years ago
by MyEscape
Definitely dark! I liked it as a whole, though there were some parts I thought needed another syllable or two to help the flow. Like the third stanza, first line, but overall, i loved the idea of the piece because it truly carried this dark feel to it the whole way through. The line "i'm dying soon anyway" was very creative! Kinda creepy girly! lol Good job!
*ME*
