I'll Never Forget

by LockedInEternity   Jan 8, 2008


He, the things he says that make a smile break to my tender lips.
Oh, the way his hands arrange at just the perfect place.
He, the one who looks at me with longing eyes that never rest.
His, the soft and gentle, sexy voice at steady pace.

Me, the way his words set fire deep inside my soul.
Oh, and how my heart will freeze yet race when he comes near.
Me, how every night I dream that we lay side by side.
Mine, and wrapped 'round me his gentle arms devour fear.

We, and when together endless joy runs free within me.
Oh, the way he says he love me sends welcome shivers down my spine.
Us, how when our fingers twine everything else just sweetly fades.
Ours, two single bodies when combined, both lovers eyes will shine.

He, still every word he utters finds a way to make me feel.
Oh, and when I see him any storm clouds in my mind reset.
He, the way he's always there when any part of me, depressed.
You, every kiss you gave me baby, I'll Never Forget.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    I must agree with the first comment, I didn't really like the He/Me/Our.. then He/Oh/His or something.. I really thought that was a distraction almost, and I didn't think it was really needed..you probably could have worded the lines differently and incorported the he in there. I don't know. Anyways, it's a beautiful write straight from the heart. Great work. 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Paiger

    Beautiful, I love how you use, oh, him and me at the beginning of each phrase, very creative and it totaly works :) Very emotional and relateable :)

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    I did like this poem, but I didn't like the " He/ Me/ Our" I didn't mind the "oh" and so on, but the others kind of set the flow off. The flow would have still been off a tad bit, eh. But, it'd be easier like that.

    But, I must say I did like how you had the whole " He, Me, Our, Mine " Thing going on,m aybe you could rearrange the rest of the words to make it flow better, eh.

    The only problem here was the flow, you had emotion and everything else a poem needs.

    Keep it up.

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