Woah. Thats a beautiful poem. Please tell me this isnt a real story. Its so sad. It has so much emotion. It actually felt like i was looking through the door with her. Amazing imagery. Beautifully written and great flow. NOT ONE FLAW!

"I prayed to God for some help,
I hope it is coming soon."

These lines where by far the best. It ended the poem on such a sad note that made me feel like i wanted to be that help. Nothing could have beaten these lines.

See what you did to me! :'( BEAUTIFUL POEM!!

xx
Taegan Emily

Wow this was so powerful and I could feel my heart breaking for the girl. You wrote the story with so much depth and meaning that I was hooked from beginning to end. Well done *5/5*

This is such a sad poem. but yet this is true for many ppl now. its crazi how life threatenin things in this life can be. i loved this poem, it made me cry. great work, keep it up

The 4th stanza threw me off a little bit but thats not a big deal.The poem was excellent. It holds a trace of suspence.I think you should have a part 2 so we will know what ahppens to the girl in the end, just a suggestion.Anyways,it was very well written. ^_^ 5/5

<3Amber

Aww i hope this isn't true at all this is so sad...but it truely is another gd poem!

This poem was beautifully sad, i've read a few of your poems before and I know your sad pieces usually have an interesting story behind it. Not so sure what the title has to do with it, I get that it's the life of someone but who's life is it? I thought this maybe could of been a bit longer. Maybe one more stanza but that really doesn't matter. Overall a heart braking poem full of bitter sweet emotions and a saddening story. ~Mel

Omg.. did this really happened? i can seriously imagined what happened.. it's so intense or thrilling! wow.. another great poem =]

The Power, The emotions, The Sadness.
All just seeped through your words.
Such a sad subject, makes a beautiful write.
I have no words to describe this, Im speechless...

5/5 --Elly.

Now... that was devastating. Every line was really well written. So sad, you can tell the girl is young... and thats just heart breaking. You have so much talent!

Such a devastating poem. Very well written and very sad, the flow in the poem was great and the emotion showed fantastically. 5/5 ..... Hope this isnt based on a true experience

Intense...very sad,
it started off even great
i liked this because, it was fast paced, and just had the reader till the end
amazing job 5/5