Vagabond

by Kia   Jan 9, 2008


The bright moon smiles down on me, yet I cannot smile back
As the countless stars shine forth with their wondrous light
I cannot see their light; inside I'm as dark as the darkest of nights

I'm lost in this big world with no one by my side, left to wander
And I look for support, I stretch out my hand, but it is left empty
As empty as the soul that I will forever carry deep within me

I hear voices near by, whispers coming from every direction,
I call out to them, waiting... waiting.... waiting, for a response
The whispers grow louder, but none answer my calls... then silence.

The silence grows like a raging weed. Spreading, even into my core.
Creeping up... choking the life right out of the only words I have left
HELP! HELP!... HELP! Words trapped... forever echoing in my mind.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Sarah

    I really like this poem.. It's well written & beautifully penned 5/5 great job, keep it up

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Quite intense poem, filled with powerful and creative descriptions. Atmosphere is truly captivating from the beginning to the end.
    The repetitions of "waiting" are effective and that created interesting flow in the third stanza, and the repetition of "help" in the fourth also.
    Whole poem holds amount of greatly expressed emotions.
    Overall, nice job!
    5/5 from me

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    This is very powerful poem. I really like the way you wrote it- the tones of it are captivating and the rhythm that you created is really great, with interesting and original choice of words. Atmosphere of the whole piece keeps attention ant it is totally intense. I love the imagery, too. You mixed descriptions excellently.
    Still, the poem is really good but it has a few mistakes in it- you repeated some words and this piece needs a couple of improvements.
    All in all, greatly done.

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