Comments : I Love You, But Don't Want You

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    The emotions in this are complex and described in a good way. I like the whole concept of the poem. Touching piece, nicely written.
    The ending rounds up the whole poem and it is very effective.
    I like the flow of this piece from the beginning to the end.

    Keep up!

  • 16 years ago

    by Chelsey

    I loved this poem, from the first stanza to the last word.

    Alot of emotion piled into one poem.
    And it was just a wonderful piece.
    I honestly feel like a broken record when i comment your poems.
    Cause in everyone I tell you how good it is and how much talent you have.
    But its the truth, and its the only way i can think of to say it.

    You really are a good writer.
    For your benefit and all of your readers, Never Stop.

    <3

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Again I loved the title and this time the poem was just great. I could feel the emotions you described and it was real for me. The last two lines really sumed up the poem perfectly well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Hmm.. the last line sounds confusing w/me..anyway, i love the emotions and there are some few lines i can truly relate about it.. and it really made me feel sad.. this piece such filled of emotions.. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    I like this one a lot. I think you used punctuation in a very accurate way, and it helped out with the flow. I also like how the last stanza was slightly longer than the others.
    In the line, "But I still love you like you are still let here." I thin kyou could take out the first "still" and it would still make sense, and it wouldnt sound so repetitive. Nice work. :)

  • 16 years ago

    by JustKristina

    Wonderful way of protraying emotions. I loved the shortness of this piece as well, even though it was short, the message was so powerful and touching. Wonderful work again! keep it up! :D

  • 16 years ago

    by janiL

    The message is too familiar.. more or less similar to several songs like 'you're beautiful' and 'terminal' and other poems..^__^ but nonetheless, i still enjoyed the read.
    since the thought isn't that new, you could have made it more catchy by putting a twist in it's structure or wordings..(my opinion)

    i enjoy reading your works. yeh! go you! ^_^