Don't Let This Kiss Be Our Last

I love the way this was written. It was well put together... Great job.

Beck

I'm not really a great fan of the technique wherein you use the same words over and over again.. and since you write in simplicity, this technique almost sounds redundant.^_^
almost.. cause the message was still ever so beautiful.. as always..
but you could have made this a lot better..^_^

This was a pretty good poem.. but i really didn't like the first stanza.. it was so much alike. and i think that it was a little to short, and could be more heartfelt. But i see where you are coming from and i think that this is a pretty godo poem. Keep on writing! :D

This piece was a little to simple for me. I loved the title and kinda got my hopes up the poem seemed unfinished .. like you write soo much more to it.

"Everyday day you before you leave,"
^this line doesnt make sense ...

All in all it was good piece that could be made great.

Well this is the first poem of yours i've ever read.
And I loved it.
It may be short, But its good.
Alot of people can relate to this poem.
I can't determine wether its my favorite one that you've writtten, Cause its the first one i've read.
But if their all like this, Then your a wonderful writer.

There isn't one part in this poem that i didn't love.
Good Job.

<3