Hahah very funny and original poem. the first stanza was like super cautchy and for me, deffinatly mader the poem.!
"I'm sorry to have to say this,
But your friend is a 'hore.
What was I to do,
When she came knocking at my door?"
overall i thought a cute poem , but also sincere. in some parts the flow didn't work out too well but witha comdial apporch the poem seam to keep me reading on and enjoying myself. great work---tara
11 years ago
by ThebutterfliesMuse
This is kinda cute in a weird sort of way lol heres my breakdown
First stanza- typical teenage drama going on here andits crazy circle. One pperson likes you and you have a girlfriend. Sadly this is the world we live in nowadays. I laughed though at the come knocking on my door part I loved it.
Second stanza- I love how the poem gets ver serious here. Where the drama srarts to enfold really. I love how you worded it though. As your friends friend doesnt deserve anyone because she is trying to sleep with you. And great wording here where you say she steals everyone you like. Teenagers nowadays!!
Third stanza- Its good you wouldn't let it happen you are a great friend for pushing her away here!. I love how you describe it as a test like you were trying to trap her into it. Great stanza.
Ending- I love the romantic ending here. Where in the end you chose your friend that is so sweet. I love the story feel to it too. The rhyming made it flow great. Well done! 5