Your my obsession

by Tim   Jan 11, 2008


You Helen are all I want,
You make me laugh and smile.
Hug-ing in the rain,
Damn it's been a while.

You really are beautiful,
Smart, funny and kind.

I am still standing here,
Are you f**king blind?

All I ask is you want me back,
Just give me one more chance.
I promise to make you happy,
Shall I save you the last dance?

Buts its not me that you want,
You want someone more tough.
Why the sudden stage of heart?
My love just not enough?

Why the hell do I bother?
Try-ing to make you mine?
I just want you to know,
I will love you until the end of time.

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  • 11 years ago

    by ThebutterfliesMuse

    I love this poem as well. In the first stanza 3rd line hugging is spelled wrong and doesnt need a dash. Same with trying in the last stanza 2nd line. But other wise the flow and rhyme are great and I love the emotion of it 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Lemon

    I love the contrast between the adoration and the frustration. Liking/loving someone who doesn't feel the same sucks, but you've definitely summed it up well here :). A few small grammar issues- 'your' in the title should be 'you're' and 'ing' words don't require a hyphen, but I agree that it does flow well :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    Great flow throughout the poem
    =]
    Good job!

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