Comments : Your my obsession

  • 16 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    Great flow throughout the poem
    =]
    Good job!

  • 11 years ago

    by Lemon

    I love the contrast between the adoration and the frustration. Liking/loving someone who doesn't feel the same sucks, but you've definitely summed it up well here :). A few small grammar issues- 'your' in the title should be 'you're' and 'ing' words don't require a hyphen, but I agree that it does flow well :)

  • 11 years ago

    by ThebutterfliesMuse

    I love this poem as well. In the first stanza 3rd line hugging is spelled wrong and doesnt need a dash. Same with trying in the last stanza 2nd line. But other wise the flow and rhyme are great and I love the emotion of it 5/5