Good job! flows well and is well written
I especially enjoyed this line

so many words unspoken
because no one is ever there

Good work!

You shouldnt live your life that way. you should change it. there is no way you should let such an anal person take over your life. you need to be strong!

nice poem btw. =]

-kitty

I can definitely relate to this one. I love it.

Omg that was sooo deep, I felt like I was reading my life !!!! I especially liked these lines:
my heart is now broken
my veins torn and bare
so many words unspoken
because no one is ever there
... keep it up

I can relate to this in a way.
It is very intense, filled with tones of deep sorrow in each stanza. I don't like rhyming because some of the rhymes are too typical but other than that this is so sincere which makes it deeply touching.
Keep up!

I know exactly how you feel. I miss someone a lot too, and no matter what they do to you or what happens the feelings for them will never go away..they can fade and become less important, but they will be with you for the rest of your life..=[ *sigh*...but this was a great write! *thumbs up*

I can see that you have a talent for writting depression poems and the reason will be that you really went through many aweful things.

"my heart is now broken
my veins torn and bare
so many words unspoken
because no one is ever there"

this was my best part in this poem.

i will tell you this:
- FIGHT FOR YOUR HAPPINESS IT WON'T COME JUST TO YOU
- BE BRAVE AND FIGHT ALONE BECAUSE WHEN YOU DO SOMEONE DEFINITELY WILL FIGHT WITH YOU ONE DAY....

I really like this poem its really good...
i thought the use of words u had were really good....
i know how u feel in a way bc i liked this boy alot and he liked me to like we never dated but we had a thing for like a month and a half then all of usuden it stopped like one day we were talking and hanging out and the next day there was nothing...
i miss him so much i dont understand...

XOXOXO
Britt