by Romancing the Darker Side Jan 12, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Maybe this could do some good |
I really like how you write your feelings out. Although it seems a little off-pace, the flow is very good. You're good at expressing your feelings, but this poem could've been a little more... direct. I saw the concept but it wasn't totally clear. It was a very good concept though. I really liked this poem a lot. And it shows your potential as a writer :) 5/5 |
Now this was much sadder. It sounds as though it was either about parents, or a signifigant other. Fighting is never good. |