Your poem is great. The flow isn't really what matters. You wrote what you felt and that is always the best poem you have write. My thoughts are with the both of you. Oh, keep her close to heart. It is hard for some to cope with things that happen in life, mostly the things that we can not help. I know, I fight life on a daily base. My arms are covered with my pain. But all it takes sometimes is for a friend to be there.