by kristen Jan 15, 2008
category :
Dark, fantasy /
dark, horror
I sit in my bed hoping and praying mommy stay out late tonight. so i lay in my bed with my head on my pillow and i fall asleep. i hear Mommy's car pull up in the drive way and i hear her screaming and screaming its all your fault. she enters my room with a beer bottle in one hand and a gun in one hand and i shout please mommy don't and thats the last time i seen her. she pulled the trigger....... |
by DBM
The freestyle is intriguing, pushing it along at a nice pace. The only advice I'd give to you would be to correct the spelling/grammatical mistakes. But, overall, nice job, and keep up the good work! |