Wow...
I love this. You always menage to express emotions with breathtakingly beautiful simplicity and this poem is not an exception. Truly beautiful piece, very touching.
Greatly done!

Really nicely written poem, filled with wonderful emotion. It's a shame that you didn't manage to quite squeeze it to the planned structure although I think the structure you have set here is still a nice one.
The flow is steady and smooth throughout.

Nice choice of words int his piece, you say everything you need to say without actually having to state it.

Overall : it's a very nice poem to read, filled with well thought out lines and wonderful emotion.

~Pete.

Wow! So passionate and intense write, well done! You managed to express emotions on so original, interesting way. Very creative piece and atmosphere that you created in it is fantastic, I enjoyed in every line.

Short, but sweet..and lots of emotion..great write! =]

Awhh, i loved this. It was sweet and innocent and so full of emotion. I loved how it was sort of mysterious as well instead of you just saying everything outright. The assonance and consanance you use in here really adds to the romantic feel of the poem. nicely donee. 5/5