by jLegendc Jan 16, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
A pretend angel, |
by ReBecca
Now this one I liked even better than the first one I commented on. I understand how you feel in this. You'd have to read my poem "Seet Seduction" to understand why. This was great and so honest about the things you've done. It will probably take a girl to do this to you for you change your ways like you say in the end. Great Job. |
by The Queen
I liked the title....and i liked everythin bout the poem....ive read 3 of ur poems so far and ur a great writer..keep it up.. |
"Many tears have already been spent, |
Good flow and i was digging it until the last stanza when you used the word curse twice..that repetitiveness kind of made me not like the ending..but the rest of it i really liked..i liked the word choices you used..keep up the good work. and i suggest maybe changing the ending a bit? but its only a suggestion..i tend to not change my work based on what others say either... |