Wow thts a brilliant poem. keep upthe good work. x

Wow...
I feel deep connection to this piece. You truly expressed your emotions here excellently, from the beginning to the end. This is one of the most original and powerful pieces I've read in a while. The whole metaphor is astonishing.
I like your choice of words through the whole piece and the ending lines simply left me in awe. You definitely have a way with words.
Greatly done. I really can't find anything to critique here so I just have to offer my honest compliments.
Keep up!

I love how you take a childhood game and make it into something totaly new. a diffrent way to look at things , reminds me a lot of the song Ring aroung the Rosey....that song was about a disease. i give it a 5/5
it reveles strong emotion and draws in an audience very well.

Interesting. I really liked how you used "Rock, Paper, Scissors" It was a very common phrase used in a very different way. It's great to think beyond things and try to come up with different meanings. So I give you a lot of props for originality.

I think that the flow could use some work, but I really liked how it didn't rhyme. It let you express your emotions more freely. Most people just worry about the rhyme and don't even think about the emotion they should be putting into their poem.

So, I'm thinking the poem is about this person who you're close to, but you lost them to someone else [As things continue to lose interest, and I lose you to another]. Then, you destroy yourself with drugs, to try to rid yourself of the pain [Left to swallow my habits of substance abuse]. Then at the very end you end up killing yourself [The paper, my note to those I left behind Get ready to end it all as I take another line].

I put in the bracetts what gave me the idea's of what I thought was happening. If I'm wrong about what this poem is about, it would be great if you could, maybe, tell me? I'm very curious.

I thought this was an awsome poem.

Keep writing!
Cayce

What can I say that hasn't already been said? Absolutely amazing and one of my favorites.

Oooo, nice way of tying it together. your poem made me see that game in a new light ;D but will a scissor really cause the most damage to someone compared to the note? hmmm...

In retrospect to narrators life, the scissors are the most damaging part.

A beacon of a life slowly wasted away

^ Personally, I think poetry should have minimal use of a's and etc. Maybe you could change 'a life' and replace a with a adj? Would make it sound so much more interesting.

The scissors, my release snips my ties to the world

^ You could easily take out the 'my' before ties. Would soung great.

I liked the idea of "Rock, paper, scissors" ..Was interesting. But, there was just so much use of common words, such as 'to' 'a' 'i' 'my' And words like that. It was a good poem though..

That was really good. i loved the flow and whole idea of this poem.

Never before has the imagery of such a lighthearted game made my heart so heavy

Blown away. Its one of the best works i've seen in a good long while. very original. I slowly demoralized while i was reading this. and i love when i get that.....excellent

Just the idea almost is worth a 5/5 but the poem came through in a big way. Definately a strong write and its so poetic and perfect. I love finding gems like this nice work 5/5 for sure

I thought this was an amazing write. The overall idea was magnificent, and i loved how you used "rock paper scissors". It was a death poem of new sorts, there was nothing cliche about it. I thought it flowed very well and it was an easy read. A well deserved 5/5