Comments : You Can't Be Me

  • 16 years ago

    by PygmyPuff

    Its decent. I mean its super cute, however the second line of the first stanza is too close to the first line and the last line, so it seems as though there is an a-a-b-a R.S, then it doesnt follow through with the rest.

    Also the third line of the last stanza has an inconsistant flow.
    =C
    lol

    [PygmYPuff]