Comments : Don't give up on what you once said was most important to you

  • 16 years ago

    by i less then 3 you

    Wow great poem lollz
    pleez comment one of mine lollz

  • 16 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    "But our past is still too much of my present
    I just can't seem to forget it."

    ~Incredible lines, right there
    A+ on creativity, although I could careless if that line is or isn't cliche. =]]]]

    The only error I saw in this poem was
    "Than come on and prove it to be." = "Than come on and prove it to Me."

    and that's it.

    This is a beautiful poem. It rings upon a cliche idea and brings a little "umph" to it. I found that it did lack an order of events, but I found that was quite alright at the same time =]

    You did a wonderful job on this poem,
    and I can very much so relate it to how I am feeling right now.

    Good job!

    5/5
    ~Stephen White

  • 16 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Oh, I forgot. Don't forget to edit the poem and change this:

    "Itâ??s obvious that I'm " to "It's obvious that I'm"

    ~sorry, I forgot to put that in my previous comment

    sdpw

  • 16 years ago

    by Dan

    Beautiful poem. The emotion was very evident and powerful. Great job and I know that feeling very well.

    -Daniel