Mommy, Can You Hear Me?

=[ to be truthfull I wasnt actualyl going tor ead this poem because It didn't captivate me but once I read it I was just in shock. I'm am seriously sorry for your loss. Of course she wouldnt want you to cry though =] she's looking down on you and she is proud of her child ^^ mwah xxxx

This was so sad.
i am so incredibly sorry.
my thoughts are with you.
5/5

Awwwz thats soooo sad!...........so your mom rele did pass away!!!!....and a day after my bday!! im srry and if u ever need to talk im here!! pm me!!!

<3 i love you silly

First off I really want to say i'm sorry for your loss. I know there is nothing anyone can say to take the pain away but writing is one beautiful thing to help express it.

I am finally coming to the realization- you're gone,
For the past two years I've mastered hiding the pain...
But now I am starting to feel it, and it hurts so bad;
[Please just come back so I can stop crying, please]

The opening stanza of this piece was beautiful, Beautifully sad. The first line gripped my heart and really pulled me in because of the raw emotions I felt flowing from it. The second and third line I felt so much sorrow pour from your heart, as though you were finally letting your feelings flow. The last line of that stanza again played with my emotions making me feel as much as I could from you to my emotions.

Day after day my anger just keeps building up...
I don't exactly know what to do, I just want to cry;
There is no word in any dictionary that can describe it-
The longing to hear your voice, hoping to see your face.

The first line of this stanza was expressed deeply, It showed the other side of your feelings. Not just sadness but anger. The second line just about had me in tears. That was painful, really painful. Third line I adored. The truth within that was gorgeous. I can't express my feelings towards that very line. One thing I can tell you though was it left me speechless and that it was my favorite throughout this poem. The last line. Breath takingly sad.

But I know I will never see you again, never again...
I hope that one day I can visit you in Heaven but,
Right now I am not so sure that will ever happen-
The pain in my stomach grows with every tear;

First line of that stanza I liked the reptition of never again, it made me feel as though your voice was fading into the distance. Quite a stunning effect.
The second and third line were emotion packed. Your thoughts ran wild there.
"The pain in my stomach grows with every tear;" That feeling I truely do understand. The empty lost painful feeling which is in your stomach. You explained that perfectly.

The light outside my room is still on after all this time,

I truely loved that line. It is my second favorite throughout this poem.

Maybe in hope that it's not true, even though I know it is

They are the most painful words.

I know you never liked when I cried, but it hurts-
Mommy, I miss you so much that I can't help but cry...

You ended this so deeply. This was a touching piece which you have written straight from the heart. The flow was smoothe, your word choice really effective. Overall an amazing poem. 5/5 definitly. ~Mel

This poem was so deep with emotion it almost made me cry.I am so sorry that this happened.This was a fabulous poem though.5/5

<3Amber