Fall

Very nice write simple and smooth to the touch. great word choices... I'm glad it's spring here finally.

Heya,

First of all I wanted to thank you for your comment you wrote on one of my poems a few weeks ago. It was very accurate, especially the part about confusion. Good on you to try and interpret the poem, and be brave enough to elaborate.

The beginning of your profile made me laugh, in a good way - i didn't read the rest.

As for the tankas...I love Japanese-style poetry. Always refreshing. I like the way the fall poem is indifferent and placid, but the mood in the winter poem is insidious, almost violent. Nice personification. I didn't think tankas were meant to rhyme but I'm probably wrong, I forget.

Take care girl.

I love how you put the tanka together. and the use of the seasons was good too. it was all around a terrific poem i had to read it over a few times just cause i liked it :-) good work