The Cutters Perfect Plea

by AmberSherrellxxIve Been Sitting Here Trying To Find Myselfxx   Jan 18, 2008


There is this girl
I use to know
She wears a smile
And tears don't show

But her heart is broken
She's falling apart
All that remains
Are pieces of her heart

Torn and tattered
Used and abused
But don't worry
She'll end her life soon

Because nobody was there
When she needed them most
That walked straight passed her
As if she were a ghost

She looks in the mirror
With razor in hand
She's finally giving up
No more to withstand

Four inch incisions
Carved down her wrist
She silently knows
That she won't be missed

She sits on the floor
Waiting for demise
Finally she lets it out
And breaks down and cries

Her life slowly drains
She waits for it to end
She starts to pray
''Forgive me for I sin''

This razor blade
Has set her free
Blood pours down
The cutters perfect plea

Copyright-Amber Palmer

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  • 16 years ago

    by ABake

    I like the title. It intrigues me a lot. I have no idea why though. Lol. Your poem maintains a constant ryhme while the flow is still a bit shaky. Again, I am not a flow expert and rarely pay attention while writing my own. Lol.

    passed>> i think you meant past. Could just be me :]

    Four inch incisions
    Carved down her wrist
    She silently knows
    That she won't be missed

    I like that stanza, it was the only one that really was like boom. I don't understand why you put silenty in there. Just me more than likely. Not sure though..

    In stanza 8 you said Forgive me I sin for some reason that does not sound grammatically correct. Forgive me for my sins? Or something other than that. Lol.

    Other than the minor mistakes a greatly written peice. I loved it && you summed it up greatly with the last line..
    Great job :]]

    Amber.

  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    Amazing write. you really captured the
    emotion and easily created a picture for the
    reader to imagine! :] the idea of the poem is
    very nice and well thought out. flawless flow.
    :] and my favortite stanzas. .

    "She looks in the mirror
    With razor in hand
    She's finally giving up
    No more to withstand"

    great write 5/5.

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