I absolutly love this =]

Wow, this poem was amazing. One of the best suicide poems I've ever read. It' was very well written and the flow was just great. Good job! 5/5

.:CiNdY:.

Magnificent, breath-taking, amazing, heart-stopping, leaves the reader speechless and wanting more. The perfect suicide poem ((even if that sounds horrible)). The only thing that might make it better is if you used punctuation. Other than that i see nothing wrong with it at all. You have talent, dont be afraid to use it. 5/5

Signed,
Alexander

Wow, thats really spooky!! ..you got a good flow going on in this poem, very constant. Love the rhyming, huge fan of poems that rhyme haha....nice write hun! sad, but good! :)

take care -n- keep it up!!

YO! the last line is really haunting... "I'll see you in my dreams" damn! a well expressed emotions and you just used simple words to show what you're feeling.. that's amazing.. nice! =]

OMG, this was absolutely amazing, and i know some people might say, UR ONLY 13. age doesnt matter, im only 14 and i write pretty good, and this poem is as good as if a 25 year old wrote it, its simply amazing, and the rhyming never seemed forced, and the flow was great to, well deserved, 5/5

Stephanie Naylor

Hmmm well i'm not much a fan of the razor-suicide-sha-bang-bang. Everyone does it.. but hey. It's some people's way of letting out emotion so COOL.

I think the only thing you can do is to get some Puncuation and Capitalization in there to pretty it up a bit.

I didn't really feel much emotion .. I suggest using a stronger vocabulary like for example:

She cuts her wrist and its bleeds red

Grasping her silver scepter she bares her wrist
Hunger is in her eyes as she slices delicately
Crismon greets her as she continues to cut
Decorating her skin with those cruel actions...

Much better. Well hoped it helped

This poem has a certain structure which makes it hard on the flow. The rhyming here are nice, and the choosing of words fit the subject perfectly. Nice poem overall 4/5

Amazing. really good. love the rhyming and the choice of words.

For this being about suicide it seemed more dark than it did sad.
the fact that you stated that you would haunt a person, was amazing
5/5

This one is going on my faves list! <3 I loved it! Beautiful, the emotion and meaning if portrayed perfectly. The goodbye at the end also helps make the title seem more real. 5/5

Well I'm not the kind of person that likes poems that have people that say how much they hate their life but..this was pretty good. It didn't flow very well..and you could have use more complex words than be so simple and to the point most readers like to explore the poem and find the story behind it. but i will let you slide.
5/5
<3tay

Like it alot.5/5

Very very nice poem...haha. i just called a poem about suicide nice. i mean the flow of course. keep it up!

This poem is very well written! You did a great job on this. The flow was a little off in some places, but with puncuation i think that that can be fixed. This left me with chills, and the last line was my favorite, perfect way to end this poem. Keep it up! :]

Wow... that was so powerful! Your emotion and pain were sooo strong. This poem just blew me away, every word and it was flawless in flow!

First of all this poem could be so much better if you replace -I- in same parts, that is of course just my opinion but I the fact that you used-I- so many times left a bad impression on me.
I read a few poems that are similar like this one but I still think that you done a good job, it could be more intense but it is very interesting and few lines are truly excellent.

Wow that was pretty intense.. even though the each line was short, it was enough to make the reader very involved in the poem.

nice job.5/5

Well this wasn't exactly unique. I've read a lot of poems like this. Even I have written poems like this, but I mean hey if you need to let out some emotion go for it. Every poem written from someone's heart is good.

Keep writing!
Cayce

A very interesting piece. .itz unique and the flow was flawless. i like the idea of this poem and i really like the ending. it was a great finish. a very enjoyable read. :] and an excellently written piece. 5/5.