Comments : I Wont Change

  • 16 years ago

    by pLeASeTakEMyHeArT

    Be who you are, I tottaallly feelin u on that! Nice expressing!!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Firstly, capitalize your eyes.
    Secondly, at the end of each sentence, if necessary to the flow, place a punctuation so the reader knows which way to go in their pitch.
    Thirdly, pay attention to the syllabication. It's important.

    "Its better" = "It's better"

    "Your so ashamed that" = "You're so ashamed that"

    "Its just i don't " = "It's just i don't "

    "Thats all" = "That's all"

    "Well thats such " = "Well that's such "

    You go girl! I, myself, am gay, and I know exactly how you feel. You just wanna slap your parent in the face, and tell them to GET OVER IT! =] I am rooting for you girl, and your poem hit me right then and there; I read it a second time and totally related to it. You made it short and sweet and to the point, though you could have exaggerated and increased the flow. But the meaning was raw and honest, and you're gonna be fine out of the closet where there's more air!

    And whatever anyone says,
    it's up to you to make sure you do what you know is right.

    Good luck in life and I'm glad you have come out!

    <3
    Much love.

    5/5
    ~Stephen White