The Last Thing That Meant Anything

by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA   Jan 19, 2008


You always told me that you loved me,
And that you would never leave my side.
Now I know none of that was ever true,
Since you have left my side.

I thought we were going to be together forever,
Until that night you said you were leaving.
You told me you didn't want me in your life anymore,
That it was meaningless to be with me.

The last thing that ever meant anything,
Was the night you gave me the ring.
You gave it to me with those simple little words,
And I thought you truly loved me.

Now you're gone, totally out of this world,
For reasons so unknown, not even the cops know.
I thought all my fantasies with you were real,
But they all died the day you passed away.

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  • 16 years ago

    by EssenceOfLace

    Oh my. this took my breath away! i could feel every moment of sadness with every word. especially the last stanza.

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Fluffy

    This was a much stronger piece, in that you presented the ideas and emotions coherently with the appropriate poetic techniques. Again, it's obvious this is another "you and me" type of poem, although you've attempted it better than the latter piece I read. There is more control over the words, however you should attempt to apply the same suggestion I gave in my earlier comments to this poem.

    "For reasons so unknown, not even the cops know." - This line is very weak, and it seems as though you forced another rhyme to fit with the rhythm of the poem. Unfortunately I think this sentence actually ruins the flow, so again, I'd suggest trying to refrain from the rhyme and keeping the line simple.

    Overall, a well written poem. Well done :)

  • 16 years ago

    by XxToWriteLoveOnHerWristxX

    Thats sad. i like the way the poem flowed. i think you should write more your really good at it 5/5 !props!

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